Hi Mariko! I’m sorry I didn’t see this sooner! I also think this is very good. Since this is not a music reading task, I would like to challenge you to put your eyes on the bow, where it touches the string. Keep your mind focused on the point of contact, or where the bow touches the string. As you move the bow, maintain that same placement. It may be difficult to keep your eyes looking so close to the strings, but if you keep trying, you’ll get more and more used to it. Alternate it with practicing your bow stroke with eyes closed and listening really carefully to the sound. Evaluate what you like and what you don’t like. Make changes as you do repeats.
For the bow stroke itself, if you were in my studio, I would ask you to allow more space between the notes played. In other words, allow more silence before you begin the next stroke. I want you to listen to the END of the stroke, too, especially within that silence. I want to hear the quality of sound at the END of the bow stroke. It should be open and sometimes it will even ring.
I would also request that you try using less weight into the string for the beginning impulse that produces that nice ‘K’ sound articulation at the start of each stroke. Instead, try speed. Still weight, but less. Add a little speed. So start the stroke fast and as soon as you hear it, slow the speed to a normal pace. Then stop, and listen to the end of the bow stroke. No ‘K’ sound here, right? ‘K’ sound only at the beginning. If you allow a bigger silence, you can determine if the ‘K’ it only at the beginning, and the end is ringing and open.
Good work! Five Lollipops for you!